Lili application

[liechtenstein]

Character Name: Lili Zwingli
Class: Priest
Job: None
Level: 1
Alliance: Chaos
PvP Kills: 0
PvE Kills: 0
Quests Complete: 0
IC Post Count: 0
Ability/Spell List: Healing Touch
Inventory: 1 potion that heals 100 HP, 1 potion that heals 100 Magic
RP Sample: Lili walked through the city with the dinner she had bought in her hands. She had been alone in the dark before, but something worried her. She heard a sound, stopped and looked around her. She gasped when she saw a figure entirely clothed in black approach her. There was no other people around. That person was starting to scare her a bit, so she started running towards her home.

However, that didn't work very long as she was tripped by another black-clothed person. The persons both muttered something and suddenly she couldn't see anymore. She tried to cry for help, but she found out the hard way that no matter what she did, she couldn't make any sounds.

She could feel the men grab her and throw her in something that felt like a cage or something. She heard what sounded like a horse and felt like she started to move.

After a while, she got her sight back and could see that she was indeed in a small cage and that she was on a cart dragged by a horse, the two persons sitting in front of her. After a rather uneventful journey they stopped in front of a small house in the woods. The persons took her out of the cage, holding taking her into the house. They put a couple of chains sticking out of the walls on her and a third person came out. He wore a hood, but she could see it was a man because he had beard.

"Wh-who are you, and what do you want from me?" Lili asked, trying to stop herself from shaking in fear. The man smiled.

"I just got a spell I feel like trying out on somebody. Now just relax, it'll be over in a few minutes." He said, starting to make gestures with his hands. Lili fell asleep, and when she woke up, she knew the wonders of chaos...

(Most of my posts are probably not going to be this long, since I'm not that used to roleplaying yet. It's just that I thought this would be a good idea to put out a "prologue" of some sort.)

[Gilbert Beilschmidt]

That's cool, but could you do me a favor?
I probably should have put this up in the alliance section but I'd prefer characters to have on true alliance. When they've seen most of the world they can change their side later on in the story, but I'd prefer no one to be cursed or anything at the beginning of this. . u .''
I mean you can have it so that the bearded guy converted her to chaos by showing her visions and she can change over at 50 if she finds that order is more her style, but I'd prefer that everyone's mentally in their own state of mind.

[Antonio Fernandez Carriedo]

Um sweetie. If you may.
Please erase 'Healing Touch' from your Ability/Spell List.
You may post it there again when you reach Level 5.

[Gilbert Beilschmidt]

This is a good prologue but the more I go over it, the more I question if it really captures your character or not.
If you could write a sample that shows more focus on Liechtenstein's thoughts, feelings and words it would really make a world of difference between me being board line rejecting the app and me being able to clearly decide whether you're in or not. You can still use your current sample as, say, your first post cause it does not effect the RP. However despite being an interesting being to a role-play and written well it just does not make for the best sample.